6 semicolons on one half page is more than excessive! This completely disrupts the flow and prose. Fit more for poetry. Lots of backward country talk and incomplete sentences. I know that's how the author wants it, but dang. An event will happen and in the next paragraph the time has fast-forwarded and we are missing part of the story. Example: a lady sees a creature and screams. FADE O U T next scene, her daughter is staying with her aunt and the lady has been dead over 2 months. I skimmed...a lot. The ending made the read seem not as worthy. A supernatural tale. Not for me.
